 GIF from http://weheartit.com/entry/101884590 We're doing flash fiction again this week. I love this writing exercise - it really gets my brain going! To those of you joining me from S. C. Mitchell, welcome! Our flash fiction this week is inspired by this image. And here's what I created for it: Her heart was breaking.
“You're what?” he demanded, heavy brows pulled low over his dark eyes. “What do you mean, leaving?” She didn't think she could do this. But she had to. “It's an opportunity I can't pass up.” That wasn't a lie. Yet she would, in one beat of her pulse, if only he asked her to stay. “It's on the other side of the country, for God's sake.” She nodded, her throat burning with tears she couldn't let fall. He paced away from her, tension in every line of his body, then paced back to tower over her. “What about me?” And there it was. The reason why she had to go. Maybe, after she left, he would grow up. Would realize what it took to make a relationship work. “I'm sorry.” She wasn't sure what she was apologizing for. “God damn it you're sorry.” Anger lashed in his words. “I need you. You can't go.” His fingers cupped her jaw, holding her fast as his lips covered hers, bruising, punishing. She held herself still, fighting back the urge to comfort, to give in, as she had done for so long. His breath came in quick pants. “Why are you doing this to me?” This time his kiss was as sweet, as gentle, as the first time. He still hadn't asked her to stay. Her heart broke. I'd love to hear your thoughts - leave me a comment! And don't forget to move on in our hop and see what Kim Handysides came up with. If you like to read romance novels of all genres, join the writers of Romance Weekly every Tuesday for our blog hop. We'll be answering the same questions, or writing the same flash fiction, or offering our favourite recipes. Tell your friends! Come by tomorrow as I host one of my Romance Writers Weekly pals, Sarah Hegger. She has just released a new medieval romance, SWEET BEA, and will be chatting about why she made her hero such a jerk (at least at the beginning...). Intrigued? I know I am!
19 Comments
Brenda Margriet
9/16/2014 05:10:28 am
Thanks! He was kind of fun to write, despite the jerkdom. 9/16/2014 12:26:29 am
A heart-breaker for sure. Nicely done. The start of a great story here.
Brenda Margriet
9/16/2014 05:11:24 am
I like to think he redeems himself once she's gone.
Brenda Margriet
9/16/2014 05:12:03 am
I prefer to think she is being strong, standing up for herself. Which doesn't mean it isn't sad, of course.
Brenda Margriet
9/16/2014 05:12:40 am
Thanks, Vicki! 9/16/2014 04:40:58 am
Made me think of boys in my past I let go to grow up. Nicely done, B!
Brenda Margriet
9/16/2014 05:13:42 am
They don't know what they are missing, Kim! :)
Brenda Margriet
9/16/2014 06:02:01 am
I love the sparseness of flash fiction. No names, no places, little description - and yet there is so much you can do with it!
Brenda Margriet
9/16/2014 06:02:22 am
Wow - thanks, Xio!
J.J. Devine
9/16/2014 08:00:30 am
I do hope she did leave him standing there wondering why...
Gemma Brocato
9/16/2014 10:22:24 am
That was so moving. Thanks for sharing. 9/16/2014 10:49:02 am
This is such a great hook. I can see this developing into something more. Love it. 9/16/2014 09:32:21 pm
Slow kisses and people leaving seem to go hand in hand! :D Great piece! Leave a Reply. |