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It's flash fiction time again! I love the hops, because its amazing to see how the same three words can launch such different ideas. In this case - sweet, pumpkin, and brush. Our challenge was to write a love letter of 400 words or less.
If you're joining me from Xio Axelrod, welcome! Here's my letter: Dear Pumpkin: Nope, that's not it, either. Other couples of cute names for each other – why don't we? But despite your colouring, pumpkin definitely doesn't suit your other – attributes. You are long and lean, not round and plump. Your skin is smooth, but dusted with bristly auburn hair (darker than the curls on your head). I love to brush my fingers through it as we lie together naked, your fingers playing sweet music on the bumps of my spine. Babe? Honey? Lover? None of those fit, either. Maybe it's because you are you. I don't need a nickname, because when I think of you, there you are, complete in my head. I can smell your skin, taste your mouth, touch your body – and it is simply you. I can't wait until we are together again. Love, Me I'd love to hear what you think, so leave a comment. And then move on to A.S. Fenichel and see what spark those same three words lit in her imagination.
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Victoria Barbour
10/21/2014 04:14:45 am
Great letter. I have to confess to having toyed with pet names for my hubby but they all seemed weird. So I totally get where the author of this letter is coming from.
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Brenda Margriet
10/21/2014 05:29:34 am
I know, right? My husband and I don't have pet names either. I think they have to be organic - you can't force them.
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Brenda Margriet
10/21/2014 05:32:08 am
Thanks, Sarah!
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10/21/2014 07:01:26 am
I loved the way you incorporated the words. It put a smile on my face!
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10/21/2014 08:24:32 am
Nicknames are hard, aren't they? It's like all of the good ones have been used too much. I loved your take on this.
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Brenda Margriet
10/21/2014 12:18:03 pm
They really just have to "happen". I don't think you can force them at all.
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J.J. Devine
10/21/2014 12:12:46 pm
This was great. I love the idea of hunting for a nickname :)
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Brenda Margriet
10/21/2014 12:19:15 pm
I think they work best when the person's "real" name just doesn't fit their personality. Those are the ones that seem to stick for some reason.
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Gemma Brocato
10/21/2014 12:15:01 pm
You started with Dear Pumpkin and I was sure you were going to go with some sort of dark, macabre letter about how much it would tear you up to have to carve it. Your letter was unexpected and delightful.
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Brenda Margriet
10/21/2014 12:20:13 pm
It was the first thing that popped into my head, and then I couldn't get away from it. I had to write something that matched it. A love letter to a dismembered pumpkin sounds like fun, though!
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Carolyn Spear
10/22/2014 10:47:23 am
Great letter. Loved the comparison to a pumpkin!
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